Editing, Proofreading, English LQA, and Feedback Examples
This is a collection of some pro bono editing, proofreading, and feedback that I've put together for various initiatives.
An excerpt follows: The first half of the webpage uses "we" and "our" and then it goes into "I" and the reader is left wondering who "I" is, who is speaking to them. "My team and I" could be easily replaced with "we" directly. "Over the past 35 years of client work, I have discovered that..." could be the first replacement with "our founder has discovered that..." on the page. "My entire team and I have worked..." could be "Our entire team has worked..." instead. "I have spent a small fortune of my own money..." could be "(your name) has spent a small fortune of his own money..." and so on. The consistency in who is speaking to the reader would help reinforce that the entire group is involved and interested in their success. If you want to use a specific message that uses "I" to present something in a way that is more personal for the sake of relating directly to readers, you could lead up to a direct quote, something like: "When asked about (subject), (your name) had this to say:" much like you already have in testimonials and other quotes elsewhere on the website.